Trisphee

Trisphee (http://www.trisphee.com/forums/index.php)
-   Art & Writing (http://www.trisphee.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=87)
-   -   Critiiiique please? (http://www.trisphee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=7833)

Espy 03-28-2012 12:46 AM

Critiiiique please?
 
...Why am I even asking for critique on a rage drawing. -headdesk-

WILL UPDATE WHEN/IF I DRAW MORE STUFFS.

Anyways. This guy. Named him Jesper perhaps becuase I was secretly listening to Jesper Kyd's music in class. Shh. But I need critique on anatomy, details, and such, whether he has a good design, etc.

That kind of stuff.

It's not that clean irl. I jsut adjusted the scanner setting to low gamma and all. You might have to right-click and view image for the full-size.


Tiva 03-28-2012 01:47 AM

The ab's are a bit off but it looks really good!

Espy 03-28-2012 01:48 AM

...-laughing ass off again-

Yeah, didn't plan his midriff out too well, did I XD

momo the peachy 03-28-2012 09:01 AM

It looks epic :)

Saiyouri 03-28-2012 11:02 AM

тнє ℓσνє σƒ мαgι¢ ιѕ вєуση∂ ƒσяgσттєη
»·,´·˙(´·˙¸ ¸˙·,)˙·,´•·˙·,¯´·˙·• •·˙·,¯´·˙·•╭☆╯•·.·´¯`·.·• •·.·´¯`·.·•´`·.(`·.¸ ¸.·´).·´`·»




☪ஐﻬ☽ I'm not sure what kind of critiques I could give you
Espy. But he looks really good. I love his
design~




»·,´·˙(´·˙¸ ¸˙·,)˙·,´•·˙·,¯´·˙·• •·˙·,¯´·˙·•╭☆╯•·.·´¯`·.·• •·.·´¯`·.·•´`·.(`·.¸ ¸.·´).·´`·»
uǝʇʇoƃɹoɟ puoʎǝq sı ɔıƃɐɯ ɟo ǝʌol ǝɥʇ

Renata 03-29-2012 03:58 AM

-grabby hands- I wants it. Espy why you no tying to be staff artist instead of staff writer. I wants them as items. -goes back to grabby hands-

littl3chocobo 03-29-2012 05:49 AM

i can only see three notable things, one, the far foot is rather pointed and underdeveloped, maybe give it a little more shape to match the others? and two, the sword/hand, the way he is holding his arm and gripping he has no weight being applied but the sword is very large, at a rough angle to balance and is most likely quite heavy, maybe you could either show him exerting a little more effort or else move/change the sword to match the lax hold. the third is the same arm >>; that line in the elbo should not be there, it makes it look as if the arm is pointing away from the viewer(that is we can see the back of the elbow not the inside of the arm)

Dorian Pavus 04-04-2012 06:55 PM

Right off I saw the abs, they don't work like that in real life.
But its hard for me to type stuff like this out so I'll just draw out a help thing. Don't take my word as gospel, I'm still in 200 lvl art classes so I'm just getting the hang of things. ; p

Espy 04-04-2012 08:56 PM

-trying to control laughter at the smiley face-

-cough- OKAY. Okay. I'm fine.

Ah, yeah. After finished, my friends and I stood back, looked at it, and wondered "...Um. How the hell do his pants stay on?" I think I lined something wrong there, and then decided to just go with it >.>

Those fingers. They weren't planned out, and I'd already drawn the hilt before I got to the hand. (Told my friends to remind to sketch in pencil and not in pen the next time I tried something like this.)

Thanks for the reference pic. -downloads-

....You have a tanto. You have a tanto?!

littl3chocobo 04-04-2012 09:03 PM

you should do an update with corrections~

Espy 04-04-2012 09:10 PM

Can't; the whole thing is done in pen. Will be using that for future reference, though.

Dorian Pavus 04-05-2012 12:26 AM

Yea. : D
Its my only sword at the moment.

Espy 04-05-2012 12:33 AM

-foams- I'm a sucker for sharp bladed objects >.>

Dorian Pavus 04-05-2012 02:22 AM

So am I. xD
I love Japanese blades the most, thought cool knives get me too. ; )

Espy 04-05-2012 02:26 AM

My friend bought throwing knives yesterday >.> All I have is a Swiss Army knife and a "Swiss Army Card". Those're the only two actualy blades I have, but then there's that pretty awesome imitation shortsword (my dad's) that I...uh...

...accidentally dented a bit mock-sparring with a kid. I'm a bit pissed at myself for that.

Rosekitten 04-05-2012 12:42 PM

I can say it looks really good ^^ the only real complaint is the mid section, but people have already pointed out things there :3 so I'm not going to repeat advice already given hehe.

Practice makes perfect ^^


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 08:15 AM.

Powered by vBulletin®