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Critiiiique please?
...Why am I even asking for critique on a rage drawing. -headdesk-
WILL UPDATE WHEN/IF I DRAW MORE STUFFS. Anyways. This guy. Named him Jesper perhaps becuase I was secretly listening to Jesper Kyd's music in class. Shh. But I need critique on anatomy, details, and such, whether he has a good design, etc. That kind of stuff. It's not that clean irl. I jsut adjusted the scanner setting to low gamma and all. You might have to right-click and view image for the full-size. |
The ab's are a bit off but it looks really good!
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...-laughing ass off again-
Yeah, didn't plan his midriff out too well, did I XD |
It looks epic :)
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тнє ℓσνє σƒ мαgι¢ ιѕ вєуση∂ ƒσяgσттєη »·,´·˙(´·˙¸ ¸˙·,)˙·,´•·˙·,¯´·˙·• •·˙·,¯´·˙·•╭☆╯•·.·´¯`·.·• •·.·´¯`·.·•´`·.(`·.¸ ¸.·´).·´`·» ☪ஐﻬ☽ I'm not sure what kind of critiques I could give you Espy. But he looks really good. I love his design~ »·,´·˙(´·˙¸ ¸˙·,)˙·,´•·˙·,¯´·˙·• •·˙·,¯´·˙·•╭☆╯•·.·´¯`·.·• •·.·´¯`·.·•´`·.(`·.¸ ¸.·´).·´`·» uǝʇʇoƃɹoɟ puoʎǝq sı ɔıƃɐɯ ɟo ǝʌol ǝɥʇ |
-grabby hands- I wants it. Espy why you no tying to be staff artist instead of staff writer. I wants them as items. -goes back to grabby hands-
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i can only see three notable things, one, the far foot is rather pointed and underdeveloped, maybe give it a little more shape to match the others? and two, the sword/hand, the way he is holding his arm and gripping he has no weight being applied but the sword is very large, at a rough angle to balance and is most likely quite heavy, maybe you could either show him exerting a little more effort or else move/change the sword to match the lax hold. the third is the same arm >>; that line in the elbo should not be there, it makes it look as if the arm is pointing away from the viewer(that is we can see the back of the elbow not the inside of the arm)
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Right off I saw the abs, they don't work like that in real life.
But its hard for me to type stuff like this out so I'll just draw out a help thing. Don't take my word as gospel, I'm still in 200 lvl art classes so I'm just getting the hang of things. ; p |
-trying to control laughter at the smiley face-
-cough- OKAY. Okay. I'm fine. Ah, yeah. After finished, my friends and I stood back, looked at it, and wondered "...Um. How the hell do his pants stay on?" I think I lined something wrong there, and then decided to just go with it >.> Those fingers. They weren't planned out, and I'd already drawn the hilt before I got to the hand. (Told my friends to remind to sketch in pencil and not in pen the next time I tried something like this.) Thanks for the reference pic. -downloads- ....You have a tanto. You have a tanto?! |
you should do an update with corrections~
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Can't; the whole thing is done in pen. Will be using that for future reference, though.
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Yea. : D
Its my only sword at the moment. |
-foams- I'm a sucker for sharp bladed objects >.>
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So am I. xD
I love Japanese blades the most, thought cool knives get me too. ; ) |
My friend bought throwing knives yesterday >.> All I have is a Swiss Army knife and a "Swiss Army Card". Those're the only two actualy blades I have, but then there's that pretty awesome imitation shortsword (my dad's) that I...uh...
...accidentally dented a bit mock-sparring with a kid. I'm a bit pissed at myself for that. |
I can say it looks really good ^^ the only real complaint is the mid section, but people have already pointed out things there :3 so I'm not going to repeat advice already given hehe.
Practice makes perfect ^^ |
Mine is more of a display piece but you could still stab someone with it and kill them. Good 'nuff for me. ha.
My uncle has an electric knife sharpener that I've thought about running it threw. xD |
I had half a mind to buy a kunai set back a few years ago for throwing practice >.>
And my friend told me he's try to get his hands on his shuriken for me back in middle school, but I never heard back about that >.> |
aww. D :
BTW, if you ever want me to redline your work or even just take a look at it just tell me. : ) |
The Tech on the Arm's and legs,look too flat, and the joints look like they wont bend, I suggest adding more ear details around the elbows or make a space where his scrawny elbow shows, same for the knee. He looks like some one is pulling his hair from behind, have him lean with the sword more and he won't look like some one gave him a wedgie or put ice down his back.
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Espy! It looks so great! The only thing I thought was a little off was the lower abs area but I think people already told you. <3
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Laughing my ass off at Rakura's critique. But holy crap, so true XDDD
Ah, might as well toss another WIP up here. Practicing drawing armor because my friend wants me to do concept art for a WIP RTS/RPG game and I need to draw guards. With armor. Auuuugh. https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net...65519305_n.jpg |
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